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I’m here to become a better writer — please give me any and all feedback you have on my story or writing. Thank you in advance! šŸ’š

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Joyce (ourGOLDgame)'s avatar

It reads incredibly well/easily/flowingly🄹 I understand your fans now.

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Thank you so much! I appreciate you taking the time to read šŸ’ššŸ’š

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Joyce (ourGOLDgame)'s avatar

šŸ’š I really have been thinking recently that it’d be best for me not to take any focus away from dealing with slightly precarious situation my life right now, but couldn’t help slipping into the world of the beanstalk cafe and reading all chapters šŸ˜‚ now I await the next chapters šŸ˜‚

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Oh no, I hope the things in your life sort out soon! Hopefully my story was a fun little escape to distract you from what’s going on. Thanks so much for reading, it means so much to me 🄹🄹

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Andrew Taylor's avatar

Gillian’s matter-of-factness is adorable haha.

Really excited to see what happens when Jack starts saying all the latin words, maybe he’ll just summon Cthulu instead and Gillian won’t have to worry

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

lmaooo

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Devyn T Moore's avatar

I think a sarcastic world weary Cthulu could work.

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

Ok maybe I need to rewrite the whole book hmm

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Devyn T Moore's avatar

Book Two: Princess and the Cthulu

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Devyn T Moore's avatar

He is like oh no her WORK number!? And she is like "Shit I need a phone... uh... this is the only number I have."

These two characters are so adorable, and they both have such clear and different communication styles. Which makes all the miscommunication totally believable. Her stunt with Elizebeth was hilarious, and I love how innocent Jack seems when he finds out she was lying.

She is going to stalk him all the way to Oxford lol.

Next chapter please :)

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Devyn T Moore's avatar

Especially 700 years of it

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

You guys need to be nice. They’re just awkward little dorks and Gillian spent her formative years in a dungeon 🄺🄺🄺

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Lady Of The Lake's avatar

No spoilers!

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

Oops 😬

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

Fuego. The dialogue here is amazingly done. Chemistry 🧪 blooming

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

🄹🄹 this means so much coming from you. I am feeling intimidated that you’re reading this tbh 🫣

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Edward.Marlo.Ruiz's avatar

Noooo, I am a gnat, no worries šŸ•³ļøšŸ˜¶ā€šŸŒ«ļø

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

ok good

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Anoushka's avatar

i can't stop grinning like mad while imagining Gillian "staring at their clasped hands with her eyebrows drawn." she's so cute!!!

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

hehehe thanks for reading!

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Annieguile Bentulan's avatar

Ohhh I love slow burn... You’ve set the perfect stage for tension to simmer, it's Chef's kiss!! I have nothing to nitpick on. This is indeed beautifully done. Poor Jack, Gillian just doesn't have a phone, love. hahah I cant wait for the next chapter šŸ˜šŸ˜šŸ˜

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Thank you so much for reading and the lovely comments šŸ’š Jack will hopefully figure it out one day šŸ˜…šŸ˜…šŸ˜…

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Lady Of The Lake's avatar

Well this chapter was quite a fun one-

I need more of this dynamic between Jack and Gillian.

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Lady Of The Lake's avatar

ALSO

They are absolutely adorable.

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

Thank you! šŸ’š

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Happy Nielsen's avatar

You were in a terribly good mood when you told me every other sentence was awful? God id hate to see you in a terribly bad mood

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