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Christine Witcher's avatar

“Stop. Calling. Me. Gillian.”

Oh, Gill! 🥺

Get your shit together, Jack.

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Andrew Taylor's avatar

I love your writing, as always. A critique:

Something about the chapters where they abruptly take off into the castle, meet his long-lost relative, he almost dies -- As I said before, it seemed to be a bit fast, plus it felt really unlikely Jack would go along with it all.

You've NAILED it for these last 3 chapters. His hesitancy, the pace, all of it (for me personally). This is exactly what I would expect from him, and it's also nice how Gillian switches up when she feels slighted.

So ironically the critique is that this chapter is great, but it's making me realize how I felt about some of the others.

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