So... Temporarily ignoring the last couple of paragraphs, I can see how this was not a 'planned chapter'. I find Jack's character comes across much more richly here (but still in a men don't say what they feel way). It feels like you *had* to write this one for the characters, not to get to a plot point. I very much like that approach. More please.
You nailed it! The last paragraph was how I was going to start chapter 14 😳 I’m always rushing to get to the plot points but the characters were begging for some time to think things through and I’m so glad you agree! Thanks for always taking the time to read and comment 💚💚
SAY WHAT NOW. No one writes cliffhanger endings as good as you do 😭 I love this chapter. Jack's reactions are so valid but my heart breaks a little for poor Gill 🥺
You really nailed the emotions in this one! And somehow, even though we’re coming down from some big action, the tension still builds and builds. And WHO is she!?
"She thought she’d come to terms with this centuries ago, but something had changed in her over the last week. Gillian had inadvertently allowed herself something she hadn’t had since Luca– hope." This sounds like more than a little crush Happy 🤨 I refuse to believe that Jack can't be reasonable eventually, every romance has that "won't they" moment. Keeps audiences on their toes. Also love the Harry Potter references 🤣
So glad you love the references. And if you think Gillian will develop more than a little crush after a few days of knowing some random human, that’s on you 😤
she is WHO NOW
The reveal is going behind a paywall 😈
Exactly, what the heck
So... Temporarily ignoring the last couple of paragraphs, I can see how this was not a 'planned chapter'. I find Jack's character comes across much more richly here (but still in a men don't say what they feel way). It feels like you *had* to write this one for the characters, not to get to a plot point. I very much like that approach. More please.
You nailed it! The last paragraph was how I was going to start chapter 14 😳 I’m always rushing to get to the plot points but the characters were begging for some time to think things through and I’m so glad you agree! Thanks for always taking the time to read and comment 💚💚
WHAT DO YOU MEAN!?
What happened!? AAAHHHH
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I will be here crying til the next episode
SAY WHAT NOW. No one writes cliffhanger endings as good as you do 😭 I love this chapter. Jack's reactions are so valid but my heart breaks a little for poor Gill 🥺
Aww thank you! Poor Gilly just wants to be loved and poor Jack just wants to catch break 😂
You really nailed the emotions in this one! And somehow, even though we’re coming down from some big action, the tension still builds and builds. And WHO is she!?
I’m so glad you liked it!! Your feedback is so valuable as Jack and Gill’s first supporter 🥹🥹
Who she is we may never know (becuase I’ll have to actually write it first 😅)
So excited to read this after work.
Um, I’m sorry, but WHAT just happened??? I thought- but- huh?
You thought what?? 😅
Grrrrrrrrr.
"She thought she’d come to terms with this centuries ago, but something had changed in her over the last week. Gillian had inadvertently allowed herself something she hadn’t had since Luca– hope." This sounds like more than a little crush Happy 🤨 I refuse to believe that Jack can't be reasonable eventually, every romance has that "won't they" moment. Keeps audiences on their toes. Also love the Harry Potter references 🤣
So glad you love the references. And if you think Gillian will develop more than a little crush after a few days of knowing some random human, that’s on you 😤
The way Jack went from broody window-staring scientist to ‘Mind the gap' hahaha
Hahaha I know it was so lame but I just wanted someone to say it 😂
Absolutely key to the british experience, whether you're magical or merely human 😂
Okay, I’m here and finally catching up properly. I’m going to need my sick household to just look after themselves because what is going on 👀👀
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Hope everyone feels better and you don’t catch what they have!
My anger issues can’t 😭
But A+ character depth here for Jack. You do that so well! I can’t stand him right now but his reaction and attitude makes a lot of sense story-wise
Gillian, too, has her moments of depth and I loved this chapter full of glimpses into their new dynamic
But also… Jack, I swear 😭 man the fuck up
You would be freaking out too if all this happened to you!!
Haha but yes I agree, he’s being a little bitch and he needs to grow up!! Let’s hope it happens before he breaks her heart forever 🥺🥺🥺
Seriously thanks for all the feedback! This story is so much better already because of you 💚
Aw you’re too sweet 🥹🥹 it’s definitely better because you pour your heart into it 💛 has got nothing to do with me 😉
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